Matt Bellamy

Maybe you should turn caps lock off?

Didn't Adam and Eve eat the peaches?

Did it not have a question mark?

Do you think we will forever be in a state of confusion?

Isn't anyone else confused about Hekate's avvie?

Thanks for your comments. I guess it was meant to be simple...but don't worry, I'm not :P

Does the dog on the Monopoly board count as a character?

Can I be the dog?

Are we monopolising the thread?

If she's telling the story out loud then that's fine but it's not something you normally see if something's just been written down. Anytime you need a critique, honey :)

*blinks* Well, I'm lost.

Good description you added there DM, you seem to have a knack for it. Places that seemed a bit conversation-ish: Okay now that I look I can't find many examples, ...

Ooooh. o.O I liked the way you built up suspense in this and made the reader ask questions, a good start that makes the reader want to find out more. ...

I might indeed be, yes, does anyone protest?

Well, where would you like me to lock you up? ;)